1st Blog
The writer’s use of language and its effect can be seen through the lexical choice such as the word choice and also the style of the text.
From reading the text, we can see a clear distinction between the northernmost region of India and the town of Qazigund within that region. This is seen through the writer’s word choice/diction.
For example, the writer includes ‘coolness’ and ‘colour’ when describing Kashmir as a whole. The definition of coolness is the state of something being cold in temperature or it could refer to something being attractive. Meanwhile, the writer wants you to interpret the word as meaning cold in a pleasant way. Another interpretation that the writer sets up is for you to see the mountains themselves which are ‘snow-capped’ as being beautiful in appearance. So, the writer wants cold to be seen as pleasant in nature and beautiful. So for the other word, the writer wants you to interpret color as again something that looks beautiful which is shown when the colors are mixed with adjectives such as the ‘milky blue’ sky that the writer describes. The adjective of milky gives the reader a feeling of calmness and warmth from the word ‘milky’. Which associates this feeling with the color as well. Then the writer uses ‘wrapped’ to give the effect of comfort to the reader. This is also connected with a color (brown). The phrase ‘bare footed’ to describe the shepherd boys gives the effect of closeness. Because the interpretation you have to receive from the phrase is that the phrase does not mean a lack of wealth but a closeness to nature. Which you get from the previous descriptions of the region.
On the contrary, the writer uses a more dark and unappealing tone when describing the town of Qazigund. Such as using the phrase ‘dust in the sunlight’ which gives the reader the effect of darkness since you picture the dust covering up the sun. The writer also includes a description of the smell in the town which includes ‘human excrement’. This makes the reader sort of cringe or recoil away from the smell which they are familiar with. So the words give off a different effect than the words in the first paragraph.
And by using the word ‘disorder’ it affects the reader in a way that gets them in the mindset that there is chaos in the town where good and bad are conflicting with each other. The pungent smell of ‘human excrement’ for example is conflicting with the cold air that is supposed to represent a pleasant cold. So this disorder gives the reader a feeling of uneasiness that is attached with the region.
Table C
ReplyDeleteLevel AO1:
I think my response would fit under the 3 marks section. [3]
I think it definitely fits there because in my response I show a clear understanding of the text because I interpret the meaning behind it through the certain words the writer uses. I also use the context behind it to understand the text which is shown when I interpret the ‘barefooted’ part as being different due to the context the writer gives in the text.
I also think that I use a clear reference to the characteristic features of the text since I included quotation marks (‘) to indicate that I will be using stuff from the text.
Level AO3:
I think my response would fit under the 5-8 marks section. [8]
For the first point, I feel like my blog had a very limited analysis. That’s because I compared my blog to Scalia’s answer. I realized that I could have included a lot more information and words that the writer used if I used more effective words and language to make it more efficient.
For the next point, I feel like I had some appropriate selection of elements of form, structure and/or language for analysis. This is because I included elements of the language such as the words and what they mean in the blog which is appropriate in this example since that was the main element of the text given.
For the second to last point, I thought I only inhabited a limited awareness of the writer’s stylistic choices because I could have thought of better words to describe the writer’s choices and I was lacking in terms of what I said about each word.
For the final point, I feel like I attempted to use appropriate language to link the evidence with my comments but I was lacking in that department due to my lack of knowledge. I could use more vocabulary next time that is also sophisticated as well in order to lower my word count and get more of the point across in my writing so that I can focus on other points and such.